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 |  #1 Subject: Immortal HQ  Wed Mar 08, 2017 7:43 pm | |
| Name: Immortal HQ, imm'enne Habitable: not without authorization (yes) Terrain: mountainous. Size: Large Technology Bylian Dwarven tech History upon leaving jeslore, the immortals needed to set up a base on a planet other than apex 122, there were no nearby planet; fortunatly the immortals had the bylian dwarves at their disposal. the dwarves 'build' a planet. and soon the most impenetrable place that the dracholmian empire ever funded existed, the immortals happily took base on imm'enne Description the planet is a fortress, as defensive and yet elusive as the dwarves could manage, it was truly the bylian master piece due to it's size, defensive abilities and even offensive abilities. the defensive abilities feature a structure covering the planets, making for a though terrain to fly fighter and bomber jets through and several levels of mazelike turret hallways. and a massive defense force ready to defend against attackers. the offensive abilities consist of radio controlled missiles shot out from the planet to hit intruders.
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| | #2Subject: Re: Immortal HQ Thu Mar 09, 2017 5:57 pm | |
| This needs accurately described technology. In fine detail, its defensive and offensive abilities. |
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| | #4Subject: Re: Immortal HQ Thu Mar 09, 2017 7:55 pm | |
| High Tech- is too vague. Please place this as "immortal Technology". I highlighted the issue in Red. |
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| | #5Subject: Re: Immortal HQ Thu Mar 09, 2017 8:16 pm | |
| changed to honour the dwarven tinkering, i will upload a major lore piece soon. |
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